| | | Everything to relax and revitalize yourself including Orange Body Oil! | | Everything to relax and revitalize yourself including Orange Body Oil! | myLot Discussions on Orange Body Oil| Would You Continue?? | | I've written the first 300 words of a story, and I'm just wondering...would you continue reading!? Did I do enough with the beginning, or do I need to work on it to hook more people?Molly stared out her window, watching Starburst sleep in the tree. The cat’s Orange Body stretched across a large branch, bright in the moonlight. His ears and nose twitched, his body shuttered involuntarily. Starburst whipped his head up and gazed at the moon. He stood up, never lowering his eyes from the sky. Molly watched Starburst pace back and forth on the branch, looking up the whole time. Then he froze; stare fixed, ears alert. Something snapped.Starburst arched his back, hackles raised, and hissed wildly at the moon. He threw himself backwards until he hit the tree’s body. He spun around and dug his claws into the bark. He continued to hiss at the moon as he held the tree. Molly screamed when her cat flung himself from the tree and hit the ground, his back leg bending unnaturally. Starburst ignored the break and streaked across the yard, hissing the entire way. Thomas staggered out the front door in his boxers, rubbing the sleep out of his... | |
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| myLot Discussions on Orange Body Oil| Would You Continue?? | | I've written the first 300 words of a story, and I'm just wondering...would you continue reading!? Did I do enough with the beginning, or do I need to work on it to hook more people?Molly stared out her window, watching Starburst sleep in the tree. The cat’s Orange Body stretched across a large branch, bright in the moonlight. His ears and nose twitched, his body shuttered involuntarily. Starburst whipped his head up and gazed at the moon. He stood up, never lowering his eyes from the sky. Molly watched Starburst pace back and forth on the branch, looking up the whole time. Then he froze; stare fixed, ears alert. Something snapped.Starburst arched his back, hackles raised, and hissed wildly at the moon. He threw himself backwards until he hit the tree’s body. He spun around and dug his claws into the bark. He continued to hiss at the moon as he held the tree. Molly screamed when her cat flung himself from the tree and hit the ground, his back leg bending unnaturally. Starburst ignored the break and streaked across the yard, hissing the entire way. Thomas staggered out the front door in his boxers, rubbing the sleep out of his... | |
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